the chart gives information about entertainment venues and their admissions in 2009

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The chart presents data on the total of visitors from three entertainment venues and it is measured in thousands. At the same time, the table provides the ticket price for some events that can be purchased for a single entrance or in a family bundled for four people and it is measured in dollars.

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, the cinema has the highest number of people and the most affordable price. Regarding the bar graph, the cinema is ranked in first place having more than a thousand customers, followed by theme parks had approximately 300 thousand.

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place is revealed to be Sports with under 200 people coming in a year. The table shows that football games (AFL, NRL, NRU) are the most expensive, compared to other event admissions, at more than $70 for a person and got discounts up to $4 off for in a bundle.

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, Theme Park tickets cost $70 for each person and there was a reduction of $70 for buying family groups. The least, the Cinema ticket price is the cheapest one with only $15 for a single person and $55 for a family ticket.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

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the chart gives information about entertainment venues and their admissions in 2009

In some areas of the US, a curfew is imposed in which teenagers are not allowed to be outdoors after a particular time without parents. Agree? Or disagree?

As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In some countries, fast food restaurants and companies give money to schools provided that the school promote their products to school children. What do you think is the positive and negative of this in the development of children?

beingselfish is considered a reason for job success? Give your opinion. Reasons with examples

Some species of animals are almost extinct; and many others seem to be fast approaching a similar risk. What are the reasons for this? What should be done to solve this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge and experience.