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Writing Samples
Band 8

A museum near your home is looking for people to do part-time voluntary/unpaid work. You would like to do some voluntary/unpaid work at the museum. Write a letter to the museum director to apply for the voluntary/unpaid work. In your letter - explain why you want to do voluntary/unpaid work at the museum - describe some skills and qualities you have that would be useful - give details of when you would be available for work Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows:

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Dear Sir, I am writing
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 letter to apply for a voluntary job at the art museum located in Islamabad, which had published by Daily Express recently. Actually, I have a leisure time because of summer vacation and I want to contribute in a festival which is going to be held at
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 venue. I participated in several programs at
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 museum. Here i would like to tell you about my experience, I have been doing unpaid work for many years and I have completed my studies in management. I have many skills related with
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 kind of programs and exhibitions,
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 as welcoming the guests, making bills
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 communicating friendly. Apart from that I can guide the people wery well. I will be available for one and half month, from June 15 to August 1. I will be grateful to you if you accept my proposal. I am looking forward to your response. Yours faithfully, X.Y.Z

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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph contains a single main idea and is expanded adequately. The introduction can be improved by directly stating your intent.
coherence cohesion
Use a range of cohesive devices to better link ideas between and within paragraphs.
task achievement
Fully expand on each point you raise, explaining how your skills and experience specifically match the requirements of the museum work.
coherence cohesion
Use a variety of sentence structures for clarity and a better flow, and proofread carefully to avoid grammatical errors.
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