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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree to above statement?

Some
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 argue that, in the near future,
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 will shift entirely to
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electronic
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 of
books
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 and
newspapers
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 as they are freely available on the Internet. In my point of view, I totally disagree with
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 statement because the majority of
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books
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 available online are free and often elderly
people
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 find it difficult to read e-
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 or
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 on a small screen.
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 with, some
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 on the internet appear to be free to download but actually, it is not. Most of the time, for
newspapers
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 you will be charged extra dollars, every time you download it.
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, one of the popular newspaper companies in New York City has introduced a monthly subscription scheme for e-newspaper users. It charges you twenty-five dollars per month to gain access to read or download papers online.
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,
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books
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 of famous authors are not free at all. Still, you have to pay the equal price of its printed version to purchase the e-book.
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, elderly
people
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 are not much into electronic
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. They always need to go for printed
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, especially
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. Still,
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 cost
people
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 a few dollars and after purchasing they can carry the newspaper wherever they go and
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 they can read them at their own pace.
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 the University of California conducted a survey to address the preference for printed or electronic
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 of
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 among elders. Participants of more than sixty years were selected randomly and the results revealed that more than half of the
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 preferred to go for printed ones rather than electronic ones. The reason identified as,
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 suffer from irritation of the eyes once they are looking at the screen for a long time. In conclusion, the majority of
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books
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 available on the internet are not free for users and they might undergo subscription services or users are charged as same as printed
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. Elderly
people
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 are often reluctant to go for
e-
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books
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 because they are not convenient for them. So, with the support of the above facts, I can totally disagree with the above statement.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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