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Some people think that physical strength is important for success in sport, while other people think that mental strength is more important. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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is
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 changed a great deal, especially how people
success
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succeed
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 in
sport
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That
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include
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includes
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changing
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changes
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 in physical
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strength
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apply
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and mental
strength
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 .
type
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Type
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 of
strength
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 is
one
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 of the major
issue
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issues
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 that affect the activity of people in
sport
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This
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 assay will examine the physical
strength
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 and the mental
strength
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.
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One
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 the
one
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 hand , in terms of the positive
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 of
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physical
strength
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 , there are several important
benefit
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benefits
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tips
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related to
the
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physical
strength
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First,
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the style of
this
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sport
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 is
one
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 of the most important
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point
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points
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.
This
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need
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 to have many tools to improve the right side of the
body
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 hand
dive
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need
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high
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a high
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 cost .
.
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Second , water activity is another major
point
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this
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 people needed to do
this
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sport
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 in a positive way.
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 , the
body
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wight
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weight
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 is the main
point
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 to do
this
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sport
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This
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 will make the
sport
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 harder than other
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sport
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sports
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.
For example
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,
the
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a
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body
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person
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 with 90 kg cannot do
this
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sport
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On the other hand
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.
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,
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 in terms of the right
points
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 of
the
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mental
strength
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, there are
also
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strongest
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the strongest
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the
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apply
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mental
strength
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, the growth of
a
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healthy material in the
body
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 during
the
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mental
strength
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sport
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sports
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 is
one
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 of the most important
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point
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points
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.
This
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because
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 the
body
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 activity after relaxation time.
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 , the cells in the leg become strong and active.
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 , another major
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points
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, it
increase
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increases
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 the years of the
body
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According to
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 the
kuwait college
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Kuwait College
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of studies
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studies
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, there are more than
one
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 study
was
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that has been
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 published that support
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this
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these
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points
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 and
leading
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lead
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 to
the
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apply
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successful
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sport
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sports
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.
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, the increase
of
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the
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length is
one
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 of the strongest crucial
points
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In addition
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 ,Harvard research in 2020 , was published
a
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stronger papers that have a positive result . In my
opinion
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opinion,
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 it is the best
sports
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sport
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 which
leading
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leads
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 to
have
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apply
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a
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apply
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better health in the future . In conclusion, it is clear to see that the physical
strength
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 and mental
strength
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 for
best
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the best
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sport
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 have many
benefit
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benefits
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apply
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points
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However
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,
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also
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apply
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they
also
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 have harmful
points
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Structure
Plan your answer in four parts: intro, two body parts (one for each view), and a short ending with your own view.
Task response
Be clear on one point. If you say you want to use both views, give two or three clear ideas for each side and a clear view of your own.
Grammar and style
Use simple grammar and correct spelling. Short, plain sentences are best for clear meaning.
Coherence
Use linking words to show order and tie ideas well (for example, first, also, but, however, in addition).
Content
The essay tries to compare physical and mental strength.
Structure
There is a basic plan with an ending.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • physical conditioning
  • athleticism
  • physical training
  • muscle strength
  • mental resilience
  • psychological preparedness
  • mental toughness
  • confidence
  • precision
  • focus
  • mental strategies
  • mental fortitude
  • brute strength
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