The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods.

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The table depicts the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum,
while
the two pie charts illustrate the satisfaction of tourists to Ashdown Museum during the previous years and the next
year
after
refurbishment
. By and large, the
year
after
refurbishment
, got a higher rate of very satisfied visitors compared to the previous
year
.
To begin
with, there were 74,000 people who visited the museum during the previous
year
of
refurbishment
, and
this
number rose significantly after the
refurbishment
to 92,000 visitors. Moving on to the visitor's satisfaction survey,
dissatisfied
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being
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was
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the greatest percentage of respondents’ experiences in the
year
prior to the
refurbishment
, at 40%.
However
,
this
number has declined up to one in fifteen following the
refurbishment
. The percentages of very satisfied and satisfied
being
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were
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the most common respondents. in comparison
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,
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both rose rising up during the years after the
refurbishment
, to
one
Correct pronoun usage
apply
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forty
percent
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per cent
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and
one
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apply
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thirty five
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thirty-five
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percent
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per cent
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