The table below shows the numbers of visitors to Ashdown Museum during the year before and the year after it was refurbished. The charts show the result of surveys asking visitors how satisfied they were with their visit, during the same two periods. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table depicts the number of visitors to Ashdown Museum, both rose rising up during the years after the
while
the two pie charts illustrate the satisfaction of tourists to Ashdown Museum during the previous years and the next year
after refurbishment
.
By and large, the year
after refurbishment
, got a higher rate of very satisfied visitors compared to the previous year
.
To begin
with, there were 74,000 people who visited the museum during the previous year
of refurbishment
, and this
number rose significantly after the refurbishment
to 92,000 visitors.
Moving on to the visitor's satisfaction survey, dissatisfied
Replace the word
dissatisfaction
being
the greatest percentage of respondents’ experiences in the Wrong verb form
was
year
prior to the refurbishment
, at 40%.
However
, this
number has declined up to one in fifteen following the refurbishment
. The percentages of very satisfied and satisfied being
the most common respondents.
in comparisonWrong verb form
were
Add a comma
,
refurbishment
, to one
forty Correct pronoun usage
apply
percent
and Change the spelling
per cent
one
Correct pronoun usage
apply
thirty five
Add a hyphen
thirty-five
percent
Change the spelling
per cent
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