You have read a magasine article that mentionned a place you are familiar with There was a mistake in the article. Write a letter to the editor of the magasine and say what error was explain that you are familiar with the place wgy it is omportant to correct the error
Dear Editor,
Hope you are doing fine, I am writing
this
letter to you regarding the magazine you published. It was released last
month and it is about the place you featured.
Manaoag is a small town in the province of Pangasinan, it is my hometown, where I grew up and stayed. First,
you described the town as one of the biggest which is not, second,
the main source of living is farming not fishing because we are not surrounded by bodies of water, instead
, we have a big rice field. Lastly
, our church is not the main tourist spot however
it is famous, we also
have different places you can explore from there. For example
, we have this
hill which is very popular because of its beautiful sunset view.
These features of my hometown need to be corrected as many people can read your article and it was
Unnecessary verb
apply
also
gives respect who
are living in that place. Hope you consider these corrections. Thank you.
Sincerely yours,
Abby AbbotChange preposition
to who
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