Many people spend all their money as they get it, rather than saving for the future. What are the reasons for this? Is this a positive or negative situation?
Lately, many topics are being seriously discussed among various individuals and groups, and
one
prominent topic is money
. Spending money
recklessly is a trend among people
, and saving is being ignored, in the succeeding paragraphs, the reason why this
situation happened and whether an advantage or disadvantage in this
case are to be discussed.
Firstly
, people
is hard to save salaries in modern society. It is a common fact that living costs in the past decade are rapidly increasing, so most people
are struggling with their life. For instance
, according to
the related organization report most families have around 50% of the salary they get each month to pay for loans from the bank, car and house
, and the remaining half for living costs, such
as bills, fuels and food and also
children's educational fee, so saving money
be beset with difficulties since they have no money
for saving. Another idea worth stressing is that a high house
price is one
of the reasons people
refuse to save money
. To illustrate, the labour organization launched a report showing that the average income of Taiwanese is around 25,000 dollars per year, but the price of a house
is more than 600,000 dollars with a used one
, and that is
not to mention
new one
, hence
, saving money
becomes less important in the mind of most people
since they have to work exhausted upon 30 years, just can afford a house
.
On the other hand
, a disadvantage impact without saving money
is that people
will lose the ability to react in emergency events when they face suddenly them. For example
, we have no idea what time illnesses will come and how they are going impact our lives or whether we have enough money
to deal with it since the process of treatment will cost a lot of money
normally so if we have no forming habit of saving, in facing sudden events we will have no power to deal with it.
In conclusion, people
have no motivation to save money
since they can't visible the future. However
, the other side of the coin is that the habit of saving money
can help us to be able to face unpredictability events.Submitted by rosolook on
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