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The chart below shows changes in three different areas of crime in manchester city centre from 2003 to 2012.

The chart below shows changes in three different areas of crime in manchester city centre from 2003 to 2012.
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The line graph illustrates the changed
number
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 of
crime
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cases
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 between 2003 and 2012.
This
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 data consists of three different areas of
crime
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 in Manchester city centre. From the graph, burglary, car theft and robbery are mentioned.
Overall
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, burglary had the highest
crime
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 rates in the beginner year.
However
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, after 9 years it had a considerable fall in their rating.
Furthermore
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, car theft has gained more
cases
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 over the years. The summary charts will be given below In the area of Bulgary crimes, the
cases
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 of
crime
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 decreased from 2005 to 2008.
While
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, in 2009, the
number
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 of crimes increased by around 500
cases
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.
At the end
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 of the period,
this
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 area becomes more stable with the amount of
cases
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.
Moreover
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, reduce a little bit of the
number
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.Car theft
crime
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 has fluctuated, beginning from 2003 to the end of 2009 with above 2.000 and under 2.500. The numbers changed around 1.000
cases
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 between 2009 and 2012.
Although
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 less a
number
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 of robberies than in any of the other crimes throughout the period, its
crime
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 levels were fairly stable, hovering around 500
cases
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 mark the time.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, crime, cases with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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