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friend of yours is going on holiday soon and has asked you to recommend a destination. Write a letter to your friend and recommend a good place for a holiday that you have visited before.Say where you went, where you stayed, what you can do there and what the food was like.

#friend #holiday #destination #place #food
Hey joe, How are you?, I hope you are doing well. I got your mail that you are planning a holiday soon; I recommend you go to New
York
 as I went there
last
 summer with my parents. As you live in Montreal, New
York
 is just a 6-hour drive from there. You should go by car, as it will be convenient to travel between your hotel and the subway station. You should book your hotel in New Jersey; it will be much cheaper
instead
 of booking an expensive hotel in New
York
. Once reaching New
York
, you should only travel by subway as there will be a lot of traffic in
NYC
, which will kill
your
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you
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 most of the time. You should visit the Statue of Liberty and Times Square without a second thought; these are the main tourist attractions in
NYC
, and they are so elegant. In
NYC
, you will have a lot of options for eating. I suggest you eat the Dollar pizza. You will find those on every other street in
NYC
; they are delicious. I hope you have the best trip and don’t hesitate to call me with any questions. Best Regards, Dhruvil
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coherence cohesion
While the letter provides some clear information, the ideas could be better organised. Ensure each paragraph has a clear central idea and paragraphs flow smoothly with appropriate connectors.
coherence cohesion
Make sure to use a suitable salutation and closing in a semi-formal letter, such as 'Dear Joe,' and 'Kind regards,'.
task achievement
It's important to fully answer the question, covering all requirements of the task. Consider expanding on each point, like the accommodation suggestion, activities, and food experiences.
task achievement
Maintain a consistent and appropriate tone throughout the letter. It should be friendly yet semi-formal, given the context is a personal recommendation to a friend.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • picturesque
  • breathtaking
  • culturally rich
  • accommodations
  • amenities
  • local cuisine
  • adventure sports
  • historical sites
  • memorable experience
  • quaint
  • authentic
  • scenic views
  • hospitality
  • serenity
  • bustling markets
  • authentic dining experience
  • pristine
  • local delicacies
  • vibrant
  • tranquil
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