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The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of households in the US by their annual income in 2007, 2011 and 2015. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The Bar Chart Illustrates the amount of US
household
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households
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 by their yearly income for 3
year
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years
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 in 2007, 2011 and 2015. The data accounted
in
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for
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 millions
number
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.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the
number
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 varied along the periods, with the constant significant amount of residence by people who have income at less than $25.000, $25.000 to $49.000 and $100.000 or more. At the beginning of the
periods
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period
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, the
number
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on
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of
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 US majority
household
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households
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 by population who have $100.000 yearly intake accounted
at
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for
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 nearly 30
point
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points
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,
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 followed by $25.000 to $49.000 groups at around 27 points,
then
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 less than $25.000 at 25. The other categories of income have a small amount with less than 22. The middle
periods
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period
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at
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in
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 2011
shows
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show
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 a similar
number
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 of
residence
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residents
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 owning, there
are
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is
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slighlty
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slightly
slight
 increase
for
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from
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 $25.000
until
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to
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 $49.000 and less than $25.000 groups around 5 points.
At
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In
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 2015, it was the peak session for the people of $100.000 or more intake categories,
that
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which
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leads
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led
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 to nearly 34 points. The other categories spot stagnant movement at house owning for US populations.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • annual income
  • distribution
  • households
  • trend
  • significant changes
  • economic conditions
  • policy changes
  • social factors
  • income categories
  • lowest categories
  • highest categories
  • observed data
  • comparison
  • years under review
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