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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is believed that for some
profession
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, like engineers or doctors, it should be mandatory to get a job in the
country
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 where they studied,
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 others think that these
people
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 should be allowed to choose where they want to
work
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.
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 essay agrees
people
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 should have the freedom to choose to
work
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 in another
country
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. It is true that working in the
country
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 where they did their training would ensure that they have the specific competencies needed.
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, the level of education in all
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are
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 not the same, and, for that
reason
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 it is necessary to allow
people
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 to
study
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 in a more advanced
country
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 and
working
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 in another. Some
countries
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 have specific problems that they have to face.
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, there are diseases that are specific to only certain parts of the world, like malaria that only shows in tropical
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. It is important for the medical professionals
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 going to handle
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 with malaria to understand and
to
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be able to treat the disease. If they studied in a different
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 with a different set of specific health issues, they might not be equipped with the necessary knowledge to be able to treat
people
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 in the place where they decided to
work
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.
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, it is important to remember that some
people
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study
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 in a different
country
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 to get a better education. It is a fact that some
countries
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 are more advanced than others in certain fields, and to be able to learn in that
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 would be an immense help to the growth of these aspiring professionals. After finishing their studies, they would be able to go back home and contribute to the advancement of their field of
work
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 in their
country
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. Some nations have specific scholarship programs that
encourages
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people
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 to
study
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 in a different
country
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 and
then
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 go back home, take the LPDP program in Indonesia as an example. In that program, you are given a scholarship for
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 and
also
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 enough money to cover the living costs
while
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 you
study
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, with the requirement that you go back to
work
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 in Indonesia. In conclusion, even though there are benefits to working in your
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 of
study
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, not all
countries
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 have the education system and
institution
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 in place to support their
people
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 to
work
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 and
study
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 in their own
country
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.
And for
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 the reason stated,
this
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 essay believes that
people
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 should be allowed to
work
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 in a different
country
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with
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from
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 where they studied.
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coherence cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea, which should be supported by specific examples or further explanation. This helps to create a more compelling and comprehensive argument.
coherence cohesion
Develop each point fully by giving sufficient detail and explanation. To strengthen the argument, include specific examples or data where possible, to illustrate your ideas more effectively.
task achievement
Make sure to directly address all parts of the task and give a clear opinion. You should ensure that your position is consistently and effectively presented throughout the essay.
coherence cohesion
It's important to check your essay for any grammar or vocabulary mistakes. Use a range of structures and vocabulary to demonstrate language proficiency.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • professionals
  • doctors
  • engineers
  • required
  • training
  • home country
  • cultural
  • linguistic
  • advantages
  • economic impact
  • free
  • another country
  • globalization
  • international collaboration
  • improving
  • skills
  • knowledge
  • experience
  • opinion
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