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The table and pie charts show the number of research students in Australia Universities in 2001 and 2010

The table and pie charts show the number of research students in Australia Universities in 2001 and 2010
#show #research #students #australia #universities
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The data from the table provides information about international and local
research
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students
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 in many universities in Australia in 2001 and 2010. Meanwhile, the pie chart shows the proportion of
research
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students
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 by gender for each local and international
research
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 student. In brief, there was a significant increase in total
research
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students
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 from 2001 and 2010.
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, the number of international
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 rose dramatically for both females and males in a decade.
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, from the first information given, it can be seen that international
research
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students
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 extremely upsurged from 5192
students
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 in 2001 to 14953
students
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 in 2010.
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, it made the total number of
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students
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 uplifted from 38849 to 54081
students
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 from 2001 to 2010.
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, the diagram illustrates that both male and female local
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students
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 percentage significantly decreased from 43% to 39% for males and 35% for females.
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, the international
research
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students
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 percentage by gender climbed from 9% to 12% for males and 4% to 15% for females.
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, it
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 shows that the female foreign
research
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students
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 were higher than the male and for domestic
research
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students
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, it was the male who was higher than the female.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 75%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words research, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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