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The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people’s coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five Australian cities. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features,and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart below illustrates the outcomes of a survey about five Australian citizen's habits of buying and drinking
coffee
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 and tea.
Overall
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, it can be seen that the majority of
people
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 prefer
go
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to go
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 to a café to have a
coffee
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 or a tea
instead
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 of buying one. Hobart and Brisbane were the only cities that had the highest rate of
people
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 who bought instant
coffee
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, reaching just over 50%. Melbourne, Hobart, and Sydney had the most demand respectively, in
people
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 who chose café
instead
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 of buying the
coffee
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 themselves. Adelaide was the only city where buying an instant
coffee
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 was more popular than going to a café with an almost similar number, compared to 50 to 49 respectively. Sydney had the lowest rate of instant
coffee
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also
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 the fresh
coffee
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 was almost similar to it. Brisbane
people
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 had the lowest interest in buying a fresh
coffee
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 among them. Fresh
coffee
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 is the less common habit in Australian cities,
whereas
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 going in person to a café was the most popular one.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "instead".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 69%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, people, café with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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