The graph gives information about cinema attendance in Australia between 1990 and the present, with projections to 2010.
The line graph depicts
cinema
visitor
in Australia from 14 Fix the agreement mistake
visitors
years
old until 50+ years
old over 20 years
. Overall
, cinema
attendance was dominated by people
aged around 14 - 24 years
old and the lowest of the amount of visitor
was aged more than 50 Fix the agreement mistake
visitors
years
old.
Looking in more detail, in 1990, movie theater
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theaters
was
extremely popular Correct subject-verb agreement
were
in
young Change preposition
with
people
, around 90% people
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of people
who
aged 14 Correct pronoun usage
apply
until
24 Change preposition
to
years
old visited the cinema
for their entertainment. It went up, down
and remained unchanged at 90% until 2008. It ended up nearly 100% Correct word choice
and down
people
who Change preposition
of people
attending
the Wrong verb form
attended
cinema
. Next,
there were 61% people
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of people
who
aged 25-34 Correct pronoun usage
apply
years
old in 1990 visiting
the movie theater and Wrong verb form
visited
it
increased significantly to a level of 80% in 2006. After Correct pronoun usage
this
that
it decreased slightly by 9% in 2010.
Add a comma
that,
Furthermore
, the age around 35-49 years
old started at 60% in the beginning. Then
it rose gradually to 85% in 2010 surpassing the mature people
. Cinema
is really unpopular to
old Change preposition
with
people
who aged
more than fifty. Verb problem
are
However
, the chart indicated a substansial
growth Correct your spelling
substantial
by
20%. Started at 40% and ended up at 60% in 2010 who attended the movie theater.Change preposition
of
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cinema, years, people with synonyms.
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