The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of junk food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000

The line graph below shows changes in the amount and type of junk food consumed by Australian teenagers from 1975 to 2000
The line graph illustrates the consumption rate of three different
type
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types
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of fast food:
pizza
,
fish
and
chips
, and
hambergers
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hamburgers
hamburger
, eaten by Australian youths between 1975 to 2000.
Overall
,
while
the
the
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number of consuming times in
fish
and
chips
encountered a downward trend, those of
pizza
and
hambergers
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hamburgers
faced an upward trend. At the beginning of the graph, in 1975, it can be obviously observed that
fish
and
chips
are
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the most popular
amongs
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among
amongst
Australian
adolesences
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adolescences
adolescence
adolescents
because they had
it
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them
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100 times per year,
whereas
pizza
and
hambergers
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hamburgers
were consumed approximately 5 and 10, respectively. In the following years, the trend had been changing.
While
the
consuming
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rates of both
pizza
and
hambergers
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hamburgers
was
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continuingly rising and reach
its
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their
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peak in 1995 at approximately 85 and 100, respectively, and the numbers still remain afterwards, those of
fish
and
chips
was fluctuating
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fluctuated
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from 1975 to 1985 and significantly declined to 40
at the end
of
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period.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words pizza, fish, chips, hambergers with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fluctuate
  • Spike
  • Dip
  • Steady growth
  • Decline
  • Plateau
  • Consumption patterns
  • Fast food
  • Processed snacks
  • Health consciousness
  • Marketing influence
  • Demographic factors
  • Sedentary lifestyle
  • Nutritional education
  • Epidemiological impact
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