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The table provides information about the projected costings for sustainable forestry in West Africa, Central America and South-east Asia within the next 5 years, while pie chart indicates spendings of the projects for the first year.

The table provides information about the projected costings for sustainable forestry in West Africa, Central America and South-east Asia within the next 5 years, while pie chart indicates spendings of the projects for the first year.
#information #costings #forestry #west #africa #america #south-east #asia #years #spendings #projects #first #year
The bar
chart
 illustrates the investment
of
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 sustainable forestry in three different nations for
next
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the next
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 five years, and
pie
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the pie
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chart
 shows how those
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expenditures
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expenditure
is
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are
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 going to be distributed in
first
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the first
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year
 among
five
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the five
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 sections.
Overall
,
South- East
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South-East
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 Asia is the region
who
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that
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 is predicting
highest
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the highest
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number of
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apply
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expenditure
 for sustainable forestry. West Africa has projected
lowest
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the lowest
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 amount compared to others. In
first
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year
, a large
number of
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sum is allocated for salaries . With regards to
bar
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a bar
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chart
,
South -East
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South-East
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 Asia has budgeted 30
million
 in
first
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year
 and doubled it for 2nd
year
 and 30
million
 for
3rd
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the 3rd
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 and 50
million
 each for
4th
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the 4th
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 and 5th
year
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years
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.
Additionally
, Central America is going to allocate 20
million
 for the project in the
first
year
 and 12
million
 for
second
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year
.
Furthermore
, They predicted 5
million
 each for forestry for
year
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years
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 3, 4 and 5.
On the other hand
,West
africa
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Africa
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 has predicted 10.5
million
 for the
first
year
 , followed by 7.5
million
 for the second and 2.5
million
 each for
third
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the third
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 and fourth years.
Also
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 2.5
million
 is going to be budgeted for
fifth
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the fifth
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year
. When it comes to
pie
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the pie
a pie
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chart
, All regions have predicted their
expenditure
 for
year
 1, of which
maximum
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the maximum
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 amount of payments for salaries
which
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accounted
50
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for 50
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%. The next highest expense for set up cost.
Moreover
, Three regions have forecasted 10% of
expenditure
 for
trainning
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training
 their crew and they are going to allocate another 10% for administration purposes.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chart, expenditure, first, year, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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