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The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.

The charts below give information on the ages of the populations of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.
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The pie graphs given illustrate the expectations of the population changes in ages in two particular countries, Yemen and Italy, in 2050, comparing figures in 2000.
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, what stands out from the charts is that Yemen is expected to have more younger
people
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 in 2050,
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 the percentage of elderly would be smaller at the same time.
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, Italy anticipated that the number
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 the older generation would be greater in 2050 than in 2000. Looking at the detail of the graphs for Yemen, the youngest
people
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 in the research had slightly above 50% in 2000 with the expectation of having 37% in 2050.
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, it would display a significant increase in the number of
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 between 15 and 59 years old in 50 years. They had around 46% of
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 that age, but they are expected to have approximately 57% in the future. Moving to Italy's data, the proportion of those aged between 15 and 59 occupied the dominating figure in 2000 with around 61%, but it would reduced to about 46% in 2050 which is still the greatest proportion compared to others. Interestingly, the percentage of
people
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 who aged over 60 was just a quarter in 2000.
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, they would have a considerable incline in 2050 taking almost half (42%).
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "graphs" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • age demographics
  • age structure
  • population distribution
  • youthful population
  • ageing population
  • life expectancy
  • birth rate
  • demographic shift
  • population projection
  • median age
  • dependents
  • working-age population
  • elderly dependents
  • geriatric
  • fertility rate
  • migration
  • demographic trends
  • baby boomers
  • demographic dividend
  • population pyramid
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