As a result of deforestation and illegal hunting, many animal species are becoming endangered and some are even facing extinction. Do you think it is important to protect animals? What can be done to deal with this problem?
Irrefutably,
forests
have a huge influence on people’s lives virtually all around the world. Considering this
scenario, some people believe that deforestation and hunting should permit the people, however
others believe thatAdd a comma
however,
,
it is part of our society to keep alive our ecosystem. I completely agree with the point Remove the comma
apply
that
statement. Change preposition
of that
This
essay will examine the above-given argument about deforestation and illegal hunting before reaching any staunch conclusion.
Predominantly, there are myriads of benefits of
Change preposition
for
forests
and animals
. Initially
, forests
give
us wood Wrong verb form
gave
where
we use Correct word choice
which
it
for Correct pronoun usage
apply
house hold
purposes. Another reason is that animal maintains Correct your spelling
household
ecosystem
on the Correct article usage
the ecosystem
earth
. Capitalize word
Earth
For example
, humans use wood to lit the
fire and cook food, Correct article usage
apply
heat-up
their houses in the winter season and manufacture furniture for their uses,personally Correct your spelling
heat up
as-well-as
commercially. Correct your spelling
as well as
Therefore
, it is clearly evident that forests
and animals
are beneficial for our community.
On the other hand
, strict laws and public awareness. The Government must impose hard rules on cutting jungles and prohibit to kill
Replace the word
killing
animals
. Change preposition
of animals
In addition
, the administration should organise campaigns and explain to the people, about
the dangers Change preposition
apply
on
theChange preposition
to
enviromnet
and Correct your spelling
environment
public
. Correct article usage
the public
For instance
, in India, there is strict regulation for everyone, ban imposed
on cutt jungles and Add a missing verb
is imposed
kill
Wrong verb form
killing
animals
, such
as the tiger. As a consequence
, it is apparent that forests
and animals
are part of our generation as they are
living with us Wrong verb form
have been
millions
of years.
Putting Change preposition
for millions
in
a nutshell, following the analysis of trees, they give Correct pronoun usage
it in
shelters
and food to Fix the agreement mistake
shelter
humankinds
and Correct your spelling
humankind
animals
. Further
, it is clear that
animal maintains ecosystem
and Correct article usage
the ecosystem
forests
keep our surroundings with
full of oxygen. Change preposition
apply
However
, some time
Correct your spelling
sometimes
forests
are spread on agriculture
soil and Replace the word
agricultural
animal
damage Fix the agreement mistake
animals
farmers
crops, but it is not Change noun form
farmers'
farmer's
major
issue Correct article usage
a major
instead
to kill someone and cut trees, which may leads
to Change the verb form
lead
the
global warming.Correct article usage
apply
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Task Response
To improve Task Response, ensure you directly address the question by stating why it is important to protect animals and offering clear, specific measures to solve the problem of deforestation and illegal hunting. Your essay tended to focus more on their benefits and the need for laws, rather than directly answering why protection is crucial and detailing solutions.
Coherence and Cohesion
For Coherence and Cohesion, focus on linking ideas more smoothly and clearly. Use a wider range of linking words and topic sentences to make paragraphs flow more logically. Organize your essay with a clear introduction, body paragraphs each focused on a single idea, and a concise conclusion.
Coherence and Cohesion
To create a more cohesive essay, ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea supported by specific examples. Try to directly relate your examples and reasons to the question of protecting animals and combating deforestation and illegal hunting, making the relevance explicit.
