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Some people belivev individual are more imporant in taking care of environment, others thinks governments should be major responsible to it. discuss and give you opinion.

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 there are a number of
people
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 who claim that taking
care
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 of
nature
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 is the government's responsibility, others believe that each person is more vital in dealing with
this
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.
This
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 essay will discuss both sides.In my view, the leaders should be the ones to take action. For
this
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 world to be taken
care
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 of, it is certain that the easiest way to address environmental problems is to take action individually because each person can deal with
nature
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 directly on the smallest
scale
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.
Additionally
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, on a bigger
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, the community can deal with natural issues by combining their forces.
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, it
also
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 depends on each individual to take action or not and
people
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 usually lack in terms of equipment and power to deal with some problems.
For example
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, many
people
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 can pick up trash and plastics on the beach but they cannot stop the ocean from being polluted.
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, governments
posses
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possess
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 the ability and power to handle
nature
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 on a greater
scale
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 than
people
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 themselves.
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, leaders can construct new laws and regulations to directly force
people
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 to address issues and take
care
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 of
nature
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.
In addition
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, with the cooperation between governments, it is possible to handle the environment on a global
scale
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.
For instance
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, If EU governments cooperate with each other
this
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 could lead to regional size of taking responsibility
of
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for
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 environmental issues . In conclusion,
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 society as individuals can take
care
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 of
nature
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 directly on a small ratio, the rulers possess the ability to address
this
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 issue in global size. In my perspective, It should be the government's responsibility to take
care
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 of the environment.

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