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The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.
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The given graph depicts the total
number
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 of
tourists
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 who visited the Caribbean
island
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 whether staying on
cruise
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ships
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 or on the
island
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 from 2010 to 2017
Overall
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, the total
number
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 of
tourists
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 increased noticeably throughout the given years.
Whereas
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, the figures of
visitors
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 who stayed on
cruise
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ships
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 replaced from the least to the most popular.
To begin
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 with, in 2010, the quality of
tourists
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 who stayed on
cruise
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ships
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 and on the
island
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 was 0.1
million
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 and above 0.5
million
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 respectively. These figures rose until 2013
which
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when
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 the
number
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 of
visitors
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 on the
island
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 remained stable for the next two years at 1,5
million
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 after that dropped by 0.5
million
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tourists
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 in 2016 before hitting a peak of 1,5
million
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 in 2017.
In contrast
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, visitor numbers who preferred to stay on the
cruise
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 continuously grew over the period and reached 2
million
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 in 2017. The total
number
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 of Caribbean
island
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visitors
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 was one
million
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 in 2010.
This
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number
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 went up by .5
million
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 yearly and hit a high of 3.5
million
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tourists
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 in 2017. In conclusion,
although
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 at the beginning of the period, the majority of the
island
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visitors
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 preferred staying on the
island
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, it was replaced by staying on
cruise
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ships
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at the end
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 of the period.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, tourists, island, cruise, ships, visitors, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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