It is often said that governments spend too much mo ey on projects to protect wildlife, while there are other problems. That are more important? Do you agree or disagree?

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In today’s climate, protecting

wildlife

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has become a controversial minefield. It is a widely held view that protecting

wildlife

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has an extravagant cost for governments which can be used for solving more important problems, a theory which I strongly disapprove of. The main justification why not spending money on

wildlife

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is a bad idea is in

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case they go extinct. There were several species of flora and fauna which are not available anymore. Humans have done several activities which led to putting animals in danger. An illustration of

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fact is global warming which had irreversible impacts on animals and

plant’s

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habitation

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, people are responsible

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protecting endangered

spicies

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species

in different ways

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as educating people and providing a conservation area where they breed safely. Another explanation is that protection’s expenses pales in comparison to rare species value. Authorities can export these rare creatures and earn money from the zoo tickets to provide the necessary budget.

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, there are a few facts why protecting

wildlife

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is the right course of action. First and foremost, they are considered a national heritage and treasure. Every country has a unique symbol which is popular in the world.

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, Iran is famous for its panther which is said that there are less than five couples in the country.

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but not least, every species of animal and plant play an important role in the ecosystem. A simple example that they do not pay attention to is garden worms, even though having several advantages. Not only are they the food of other animals but

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they have numerous benefits for the garden. What can be concluded from the above is that I find myself among the group who believe that protecting

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is necessary at any cost.

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Coherence & Cohesion

To improve your coherence and cohesion, focus on creating clearer topic sentences and ensuring each paragraph follows a logical order. Use a wider range of linking words and phrases to connect your ideas more effectively.

Task Achievement

For task achievement, expand your ideas by further explaining how protecting wildlife contributes to the economy and society, and compare it directly with other important issues that governments face. Address the counterarguments more comprehensively to show a balanced discussion before concluding your view.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 6.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

298 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

biodiversity
conservation
eco-tourism
interconnected issues
misallocation of resources
intrinsically valuable
sustainable development
biodiversity hotspot
environmental stewardship
habitat preservation

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