Nowadays more and more people are purchasing online instead of physically going to stores. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

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Nowadays more and more people are purchasing online
instead
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of physically going to stores. Do you think
this
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is a positive or negative development? These days , more
end
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and
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more humans are buying online
instead
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of going on foot to shops. There are many positives and negatives about
this
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topic and now I will show them in my
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essay. On the one hand , there are many merits of
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topic,
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, if you are ill or old person ,
this
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kind of
purchases
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is really
benefit
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for us because we can purchase without going to stores and delivers
of
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these shops can be
provide
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us if they have got
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serve.
On the other hand
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, there are more drawbacks of
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like if you get many clothes or other items
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online , on generally , you dislike
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much more physical actions,
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you can be
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the
obesity
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.
Obesity
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is really dangerously for our lifestyle
cause
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of
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you can not do any
exercises
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and if you do that , you can be tired faster than now your action , I think
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is reality. Many countries of the
world
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are
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mentioned
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. Especially ,
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Health Organization . They reference to populations of the
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every year. I think all of these are becoming
much more
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increasingly popular all over the
world
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. They mean that ,
,
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We do physical exercises a less '' all of these get to
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.
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, I believe that we can do all of
physical
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activities like exercises and others . I completely disagree
to purchase
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with purchasing
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on
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online , cause of
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, many populations of the
world
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are
infecting
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to
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by
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obesity
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.
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