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The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million).

The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million).
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THE TABLE ILLUSTRATES THE CHANGES IN THE NUMBER OF PEOPLE WHO WENT FOR INTERNATIONAL TRAVEL DURING 1990, 1995, 2000, AND 2005.
OVERALL
, TOTAL INCREASES IN THE NUMBER OF PEOPLE
HAD
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SKYROCKETED DURING THE
YEARS
. EUROPE HAD
EXIHIBTED
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EXHIBITED
 THE NUMEROUS CHANGES
BY
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OVER
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 THE
YEARS
;
HOWEVER
, THE NUMBER OF INTERNATIONAL TRAVEL IN
MIDDLE
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THE MIDDLE
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 EAST PLACED IN THE
LAST
 WITH FEWER DIFFERENCES. EUROPE HAD REACHED A PEAK
FROM
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 280.2 TO 400.2
MILLIONS
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 WHICH REALISED THE TOPMOST CHANGES OVER THE COURSE OF 15
YEARS
.
BESIDES
, THE SECOND HIGHEST PLACE WAS OCCUPIED BY ASIA AND THE PACIFIC WHICH HAD SURGED BY 75.6
MILLION
 PEOPLE DURING THE 15
YEARS
.
IN ADDITION
, AMERICA
HAD
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EXHIBITED
UPWARD
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AN UPWARD
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 TREND WHICH
RISED
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ROSE
 BY AROUND 33
MILLION
. REGARDING TO REST OF THE TABLE,
MIDDLE
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 EAST HAD
HIT
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THE LOWEST INCREASE WHICH
GROWED
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GREW
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 FROM 9.8 TO 15.8
MILLION
 BETWEEN 1990 AND 2005.
FURTHERMORE
, AFRICA HAD INCREASED SLIGHTLY BY
THE
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10.5
MILLION
 OVER THE 5
YEARS
.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words years, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increases" was used 3 times.
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