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The chart below shows the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart below represents
statistics
 about ownership of electrical
appliances
 and
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the numbers
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numbers
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number
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 of time
spending
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spent
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 in
household
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households
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 in one country between 1920 and 2019.
Overall
, it is evident that
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the perrcantage
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perrcantage
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percentage
 of
household
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households
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 with electrical
appliances
 had significant differences over the years. To commence with
statistics
 of electrical
appliances
,which were washing machine,refrigerator and vacuum cleaner.
According to
 the
chart
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chart,
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 the biggest percentage of
household
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households
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 was on washing
machine
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machines
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, which made up 40 % in 1920 and gradually grew to approximately 65%,respectively.When it comes to
statistics
 of
refrigerator
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refrigerators
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,which accounted for 0 % in 1920 and
rocket
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rocketed
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 between 1940 and 2019 for 100 %.
In contrast
,
chart
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the chart
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 of
statistics
 showed
amount
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the amount
an amount
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 of hours of housework per week that there
was
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were
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 considerable changes between 1920-2019,which comprised 50 hours in 1920,respectively.
Then
 there was
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a graduall
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graduall
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gradually
gradual
 fall until 2000. It may be concluded from the charts that
percentage
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the percentage
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 of
household
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households
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 with electrical
appliances
 significantly grew
,
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apply
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when
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the numbers
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numbers
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number
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 of hours of housework had
opposite
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the opposite
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 trend.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significant" was used 2 times.
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