Population of Yemen and Italy The charts below give information on the ages of the population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.

Population of Yemen and Italy

The charts below give information on the ages of the population of Yemen and Italy in 2000 and projections for 2050.
The diagram chart depicts the proportions of
length
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the length
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of life expectancy populations in
Yemen
and Italy in 2000 and the prediction
in
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2050. By and large, it is ubiquitous that the most
age
ranges of the
population
in both countries are the productive ages. As for the statistical data of
age
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the age
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range present by the charts in
Yemen
, the
population
of productive
age
is predicted to rise rapidly in the future. The highest
proportions
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proportion
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of
Yemen
residents in 2000
are
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children between 0-14 years which counts up to a hefty 50,1%,
while
the elderly people have the lowest proportion
in
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3,6% of the
population
.
Moreover
, the number of teenagers and adults between 15-59 years old
are
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estimated to increase rapidly in 2050. Different
than
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from
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Yemen
, Italy was dominant by a productive
age
range with a huge
population
, counted 61.6% in the early 21st century.
Furthermore
,
productive
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the productive
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age
range
residents
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of residents
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in Italy
are
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is
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expected to rise up to 46,2% in 2050. Not only teenagers and adults are rising rapidly in 2050, but
also
the elderly are predicted as the second highest proportion of the
population
.
While
the rate of birth children is forecasted
declining
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.
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