You and your family have just rented an apartment and one or two problems occurred. Write a letter to the landlord. Describe the problems and tell him what you want him to do.

Dear Mr. James, I am your new tenant from apartment number 341, Harrison Street. I moved in with my family one week ago. I am writing
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letter to appraise you with some problems that we are facing in the apartment. The taps in the bathrooms are leaking because of which my
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daughter has slipped twice. The shower is
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not working properly. The lock of the main door is
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not aligned properly. We have to push the door hard to lock it. All these problems need immediate action. As you have rented out so many apartments, you must be having a tie-up with some plumber and carpenter. You may call them directly or give me their contact numbers so that I can call them at the earliest. As you know I have signed a lease of one year with you and the rent is
also
on the higher side because you have included the maintenance charges in that. Hoping for
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prompt action from your side! Yours sincerely, Kiran
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Task Response
To improve task response, ensure that every aspect of the prompt is addressed in detail. Consider adding more about how the problems have affected your daily life, to fully meet the task requirements.
Coherence and Cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, try using a variety of linking words and phrases to smoothly connect your ideas. While your letter flows nicely, adding transitional phrases between paragraphs can enhance readability.
Tone
Maintain a polite and formal tone throughout the letter. You've done well on this, but ensuring consistency in tone, especially in the requests for action, can further strengthen this aspect.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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