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You have borrowed something from your friend and it got damaged. 1.Apologize for damaging the product 2.Explain what hallened 3.Say how are you going to fix the issue

#friend #product
Dear Mrs Zara, I am so sorry that I damaged your
laptop
 and I hope you are not shocked at me. I was so excited to have been
damage
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 to your
laptop
. I sincerely apologise for the damage to your
laptop
 and humbly ask for your inconvenience. I borrowed my friend's
laptop
 when I
have
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had
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 to
writing
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 a long assignment. I worked on the
laptop
 all week.
However
,
this
 week, the
laptop
 does not even switch on. I don't know how I repair your
laptop
 and I don't understand what
laptop's
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the laptop's
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 problem
.
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is.
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 I will buy
new
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a new
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laptop
 for you next month. But, now I
have
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do have
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 not enough money for
new
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a new
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 product. So, I won't purchase
as
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it as
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 soon as possible. I
really
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am really
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 great sorry for the event and request your forgiveness. Please accept
this
 box of chocolate as a token of my
enough
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apply
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regret for the inconvenience. I must
apologies
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apologise
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 for taking up your valuable time with
this
 matter. I look forward to receiving your reply as soon as possible. Yours sincerely, Po‘latova Parizoda.
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grammar and punctuation
Consider revisiting grammar and punctuation rules to enhance clarity and professionalism in your writing. Errors in sentence structure and punctuation may distract from the message you are trying to convey.
structure and organization
Try to more clearly structure your essay by organizing content into distinct paragraphs with unique functions, such as introduction, problem explanation, and solution proposal. This will enhance the reader's understanding of your argument and actions.
detail and specificity
Include more specific details about the incident and the solution you are proposing. For example, instead of saying "I will buy a new laptop for you next month", explain why there is a delay and what steps you will take in the meantime to address the issue.
tone and sincerity
Ensure your expressions of apology and consideration for the inconvenience caused are genuine and heartfelt. Be mindful of tone and the choice of words to convey sincerity.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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