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Band 2.5

You have borrowed something from your friend and it got damaged. 1.Apologize for damaging the product 2.Explain what hallened 3.Say how are you going to fix the issue

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Dear Mrs Zara, I am so sorry that I damaged your
laptop
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 and I hope you are not shocked at me. I was so excited to have been
damage
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 to your
laptop
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. I sincerely apologise for the damage to your
laptop
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 and humbly ask for your inconvenience. I borrowed my friend's
laptop
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 when I
have
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had
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 to
writing
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 a long assignment. I worked on the
laptop
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 all week.
However
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,
this
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 week, the
laptop
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 does not even switch on. I don't know how I repair your
laptop
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 and I don't understand what
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laptop's
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the laptop's
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 problem
.
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is.
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 I will buy
new
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a new
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laptop
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 for you next month. But, now I
have
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do have
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 not enough money for
new
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a new
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 product. So, I won't purchase
as
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it as
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 soon as possible. I
really
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am really
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 great sorry for the event and request your forgiveness. Please accept
this
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 box of chocolate as a token of my
enough
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apply
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regret for the inconvenience. I must
apologies
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apologise
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 for taking up your valuable time with
this
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 matter. I look forward to receiving your reply as soon as possible. Yours sincerely, Po‘latova Parizoda.
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grammar and punctuation
Consider revisiting grammar and punctuation rules to enhance clarity and professionalism in your writing. Errors in sentence structure and punctuation may distract from the message you are trying to convey.
structure and organization
Try to more clearly structure your essay by organizing content into distinct paragraphs with unique functions, such as introduction, problem explanation, and solution proposal. This will enhance the reader's understanding of your argument and actions.
detail and specificity
Include more specific details about the incident and the solution you are proposing. For example, instead of saying "I will buy a new laptop for you next month", explain why there is a delay and what steps you will take in the meantime to address the issue.
tone and sincerity
Ensure your expressions of apology and consideration for the inconvenience caused are genuine and heartfelt. Be mindful of tone and the choice of words to convey sincerity.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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