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The chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spend and recieved in one year ,2016.

The chart shows the amount of money that a children's charity located in the USA spend and recieved in one year ,2016.
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The pie chart illustrates the expenditure and
revenue
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 of children's
charity
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 over the period of one year which is located in
USA
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the USA
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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,the
revenue
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sources
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 for
charity
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 from food
donation
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donations
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 and community
contribution
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contributions
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.After that,
expenditure
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the expenditure
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 of the
charity
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 is high in program services and the total amount spent and
recieved
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received
 in the year 2016
is
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was
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 53,561,580 USD and 53,224,580 USD respectively.
Firstly
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,the
revenue
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sources
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 are mostly from
the
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apply
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food
donation
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donations
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 and it
is
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has
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 skyrocketed to a high of 86.6%.
Then
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 the community contributions are
upto
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up to
 10.4% of the
sources
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.
Moreover
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,Invest Income and Government Grants have the amount of
revenue
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,
that is
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 0.2%.There is
slight
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a slight
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 increase in other Income increased by 0.4%.
In addition
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,the
revenue
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by
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from
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 conducting programmes is 2.2% as of the records. The program services of Expenditures are the highest compared to food donation of
revenue
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sources
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 . The percentage of program services is 95.8%.
while
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 the fundraising cost in expenditure record is
upto
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up to
 2.4%.In
similar
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a similar
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 way, the Management control and General of
charity
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 is 1.6% of the
sources
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,
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Vocabulary: Replace the words revenue, charity, sources with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • donations
  • grants
  • fundraising events
  • expenditure
  • administration costs
  • program expenses
  • direct benefits
  • indirect benefits
  • underprivileged children
  • education
  • healthcare
  • shelter
  • nourishment
  • medical treatments
  • basic needs
  • financial sustainability
  • transparency
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