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The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B, and C over four different seasons.

The bar chart shows the scores of teams A, B, and C over four different seasons.
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The bar chart illustrates the scores of the three
teams
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 (A,
B
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, and
C
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) in four different seasons. It's crystal clear that
team
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B
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 scored far higher than the other two
teams
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 all the seasons, but it
also
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 slowly decreased over these periods.
Overall
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, we can see that
teams
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 A and
C
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 were lower than
team
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B
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 in all years (2002, 2003, 2004, and 2005), and it goes like
this
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 in all years. Taking a closer look at 2002, the score of
Team
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B
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 exceeded that of the other two
teams
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.
Team
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 A had 5
points
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, and
Team
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C
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 had 10
points
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. After the
year
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 2002,
team
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B
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 slowly decreased
year
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 by
year
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, but it remained above the
points
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 of the other
teams
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.
However
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,
teams
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 A and
C
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 rose after 2003. In fact, in 2004,
Team
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B
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 almost caught up with
Team
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 A, but there were still 8
points
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, so they couldn’t.
However
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, sadly,
Team
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C
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 always had the lowest
points
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 among the other two
teams
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, so it was always at the bottom of the chart. In the final
year
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, all
teams
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 decreased from the other three years. Even though, when we look at the other
teams
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,
team
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B
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 still had the highest score.
While
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teams
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 A and
C
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 saw their point scores reverse and drop by 8 and 5
points
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, respectively,

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 88%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words teams, b, c, team, points, year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slowly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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