Whether or not someone achieves their aims in life is mostly a question of luck? To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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is to find
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in life as
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because of luck, I believe that there are several reasons why
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can achieve their objectives in
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life. The main reason
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is they
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to acknowledge their passion by
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everything. Indeed
this
journey is very challenging and each of us has different obstacles;
however
, ones who
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various activities and fields will gain
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possibilities
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possibility
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finding their aims.
For instance
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their previous experiences in learning activities
likewise
acting in theatre class, and practicum in chemical class.
Thus
, it is paramount to always have
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curiosity
about everything,
instead
of only
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about one subject.
Moreover
, diligence plays a pivotal role in
this
process since
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should have
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and resilience
skill
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For example
, Steve Jobs
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almost a decade before Apple became popular
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worldwide. If he did not have resilience
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, he would
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up
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he faced failures and the world
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not enjoy his products until these days.
This
has proven to everyone that finding our true passions
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not appear
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and it requires hard work to maintain the goals. In conclusion, individuals’ aims in life did not rely on luck, it came from diligence and several journeys
instead
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Therefore
, I am firmly convinced that
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to achieve end goals, people should have strong
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • aims
  • determination
  • resilience
  • opportunities
  • effort
  • planning
  • unpredictability
  • innovation
  • perseverance
  • perception
  • sustainability
  • adaptation
  • networking
  • initiative
  • random chance
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