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The graph below gives information on the differences in clothing exports from three different countries

The graph below gives information on the differences in clothing exports from three different countries
#information #differences #exports #three #countries
The given data
illustract
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illustrate
 the various
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clothing exports from Colombia, Japan and
Myanmar
 from 1999 to 2003. Generally speaking, the
changing
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 clothing exports in
Myanmar
 is the largest.
To begin
 with, in
Myanmar
, there is a dramatic increase in clothing
export
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exports
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 from 1999 to 2001.
In
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rised
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raised
rose
 from 0
dollars
 to 950
millions
 of
dollars
.
However
, it dropped significantly in the following year which
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 to 350 million
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dollars
.
Next,
from 1999 to 2000, the trend of clothing
export
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 in Colombia and
myanmar
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Myanmar
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 is opposite. Colombia's clothing export grew
up
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from 450
millions
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million
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of
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dollars
 to 520
millions
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million
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dollars
while
Myanmar
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Myanmar's
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 went down from 580
millions
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million
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of
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dollars
 to 550
millions
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million
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dollars
. They both increased steadily from 2001 to 2002 and dropped from 2002 to 2003.
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