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the bar chart show numbers of whales , seals and dolphins recorded in the gormez straits in both 2006 and 2018.

the bar chart show numbers of whales , seals and dolphins recorded in the gormez straits in both 2006 and 2018.
The bar graph
down
Change preposition
apply
show examples
show
Correct subject-verb agreement
shows
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 counts of sea animals like whales , seals and dolphins recorded in the Gormez Straits from 2006 until 2018.
Overall
Linking Words
,
along
Change preposition
over
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 the years the
number
Use synonyms
 of whales started with
tiny
Add an article
the tiny
a tiny
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number
Use synonyms
 and
then
Linking Words
 increased dramatically, seals began with a medium count to
ended
Change the form of the verb
end
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 the period with
second
Correct article usage
the second
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 highest portion , dolphins
although
Linking Words
 they were the lowest
number
Use synonyms
in the beginning
Add the comma(s)
, in the beginning,
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 they finished
journey
Add an article
the journey
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 with the top in
result
Add an article
the result
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. Seals began the journey with nearly 42 in 2006 and it
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
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dropped to be lower than 30 after 4 years and after the same years be between 30 and 40 , and finish the period with nearly the same
number
Use synonyms
 started with a tiny difference.Whales kept in range
begen
Correct your spelling
begin
 between the range 20 and 30 until the end. Dolphins started with about 15 and kept
in rise
Wrong verb form
rising
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 to be
at the end
Linking Words
 the highest
number
Use synonyms
 in the chart in 2018 with over 50.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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