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The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of tourists visiting a particular Caribbean island between 2010 and 2017. Summerise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph below represents how many tourists visited the Caribbean
island
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 and spent their time on
cruise
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ships
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 or on the
island
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 from 2010 to 2017.
Overall
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, the tourist population experienced a steady upward trend during the given years, and more
visitors
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 preferred to stay on
cruise
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ships
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 than stay on the
island
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.
Firstly
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, regarding
cruise
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 ship options, the graph started at 0.25
million
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visitors
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initially
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, and it fluctuated for the first three years. At that same time, the number of
visitors
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 who preferred to stay on the islands, started at 0.75
million
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 in 2010, which was twice as high as the former. Following that, the number increased remarkably from 0.75 to 1.5
million
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 in 2013. After 2013, both trends shifted considerably. In comparison with staying on the
island
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, those staying on
cruise
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ships
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 rocketed from 0.5 to 2
million
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 till 2017.
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 the number of
visitors
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 staying on the
island
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 was higher than those on the
cruise
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ships
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initially
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, it levelled off at 1.5
million
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 for three years and was even surpassed by the latter in 2016.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "initially".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, cruise, ships, visitors, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fluctuate
  • Trend
  • Peak
  • Decline
  • Increase
  • Decrease
  • Stable
  • Dramatic rise
  • Gradual decline
  • Visitor numbers
  • Period
  • Data points
  • Rapid growth
  • Comparison
  • Tourism trends
  • Economic factors
  • Natural disasters
  • Marketing promotions
  • Seasonal variations
  • Impact
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