A number of people feel that animals should not be exploited by people and that they should have the same rights as humans, while others argue that humans are superior and entitled to employ animals to satisfy their various needs, including food and research. Discuss both these options and form your own opinion.

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Some

people

think that

animals

should have the same rights as a community and they mustn’t be exploited by the public,

also

the amount of society increases every day. Other

people

are convinced that

animals

must used by

people

for various needs like food or research. I believe that it doesn’t have too much value in testing different products on

animals

This

essay will discuss both points of view. A number of scientists have shown that in recent years there have been significant changes in animal exploitation patterns.

As a result

this

trend seems to become less common. Referring to some potentially negative outcomes of that tendency, some evidence indicates the extinction of many animal species.

For instance

, testing cosmetics leads to the death of rabbits or other creatures,

this

incident started being popular some time ago ( social media actively spread videos with talking rabbits ). After that,

people

collect petitions about the rights of

animals

, which should be the same as

people

However

, some opponents who state that for

people

’s health, it is right to use

animals

may deem the alternative viewpoint questionable.

Although

the social and economic dimensions of effects are distinct, they are more closely interrelated than other dimensions. It is often said that some products can cause deadly diseases or allergies, which isn’t cured.

Nevertheless

, it is necessary to take into account all the details of each individual case. From my point of view, the former opinion is definitely more persuasive, as it follows from my own experience, for I am a journalist.

However

, an attitude to

this

issue may always depend on a particular occupation status and his or her academic qualifications or personal background.

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Task Achievement

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Coherence and Cohesion

For enhancing Coherence and Cohesion, focus on creating a more structured essay. Start by introducing the topic and outlining what you will discuss. Each paragraph should start with a clear topic sentence, followed by supporting sentences, and a concluding sentence that summarizes the main idea of the paragraph. Additionally, using linking words and phrases can help in making your essay more cohesive.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

for example
for instance
to illustrate this
to give a clear example
such as
namely
to illustrate
take, for example

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Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
2
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
0
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

281 words

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