The three pie charts below show the changes in annual spending by local authorities in Someland in 1980, 1990 and 2000.
The three pie charts illustrate the changes in annual spending by local authorities in Someland in 1980, 1990,
2000
. Correct word choice
and 2000
It is clear that
expenditure of
higher education in 1990 was more than either in 1980 Change preposition
on
and
2000. Correct word choice
or
For example
, higher education in 1990 was 5 per cent
more than ten years later. The expenditure was 45 and forty
per Correct your spelling
40
cent
respectively. Furthermore
, only 4 per cent
of other
was in 1990, Correct article usage
the other
whereas
other
in 1980 was six per Correct article usage
the other
cent
. Meanwhile, for 2000 the pattern appears to be slightly different. By 2000, other
had been only one per Correct pronoun usage
others
cent
. Exactly 5 per cent
of environmental services were on
1990, but ten years later costs rose four per Change preposition
in
cent
to five. A modest sixteen per cent
of transportation was in 1980, whereas
ten years later was a tiny minority.Submitted by dnm.best on
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