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In many countries, fast food become spart of everyday life. It affects people’s lifestyle and diet as well. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your opinion and relevant examples.

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There is no objective fact that
this
 statement about fast
food
 becoming part of everyday life is prevalent in our reality because of its importance. Most people agree with
this
 statement because of its many benefits.
However
, some of the people highlight its disadvantages first. My next paragraphs will discuss the advantages and disadvantages of the same. Describing the different types of advantages, the first and foremost advantage is that fast
food
 is more convenient for everyday life .
For example
 when you want to eat some
food
 in the street and you do have not any time to go home and eat different portions of healthy foods. Another advantage that might come to people's minds might be that fast
food
 is more tasty than others. On its darker side, there are some flaws that make it problematic and worrying, I would like to highlight 2 flaws
firstly
, Fast
food
 is not good for health.
Second,
children more to like fast
food
 more than adults and it is unhealthy.
For example
, They like a lot of fries
instead
 of fresh fruits and other types of healthy foods. I think there are many shortcomings of
this
 kind and we can talk about
this
 topic all the time. Concluding the above statement, neither its pros nor its cons can be ignored. In my opinion, the positive and negative sides are mixed processes that follow each other and they should be considered more generalized,
therefore
 I remain of the opinion that it is not necessary to ignore the advantages and disadvantages and to outline their impact in reality.
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Provide a clearer thesis statement that directly states your opinion on the prompt. This will help in making your stance clear from the beginning.
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Develop your ideas more comprehensively by providing more specific examples and elaborating on how these examples support your main points.
coherence cohesion
Organize your essay into clear paragraphs, each with a single focus. Use a variety of linking words to better connect your ideas and paragraphs.
coherence cohesion
Revisit your introduction and conclusion to ensure they are impactful and clearly relate to each other, effectively framing your discussion.
supported main points
Avoid general statements that do not directly contribute to your argument. Focus on presenting focused, supportive details for your views.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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