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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate at fast-food shops between 2003 and 201

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate at fast-food shops between 2003 and 201
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Looking at the chart ,a piece of information about how common fast
food
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 was among
people
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 in the USA in 2003,2006 and 2013. At first glance , it can be clearly seen that once a week's choice was the most widespread throughout all years.
To begin
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 with, below 5% of society ate fast
food
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 every day in all illustrated years,and a similar pattern is shown when it comes to
people
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 who have never eaten
this
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 type of
food
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.
However
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, the chart demonstrates that in 2003 there were just under 10% of those who preferred it a few
times
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 a year , and
this
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 rate grew to 15% and remained stable during the following 2 years which are described.
In addition
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, in 2003 and 2013 just under 15% of
people
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 bought fast
food
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 several
times
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 a week,
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 ,in 2006 the level was one-fifth of the total of 100%. What is noticeable,is that in 2003 the top of the statistics reached those who ate it one or 4
times
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 per month and their percentage was nearly 30 for both,
while
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 in 2006 a weekly choice became more common,followed by a drop in 2013.
In contrast
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,
this
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 year was characterised by an increase in the rate of those who bought it once or 2
times
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 per month.
Overall
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, if
this
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 trend continues , there will be more
people
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 who eat fast
food
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 a few
times
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 monthly.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words food, people, times with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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