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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Modern communications mean that it’s no longer necessary to write letters. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

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There is no doubt that the communication has changed a lot over the years. These days, traditional means like letter writing
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 obsolete. I believe modern tech has made our society advanced, and brought us closer, so we do not need letters anymore.
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, the way we communicate has improved
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 technology.
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, we can now send an email or text message that will reach within a matter of seconds, compared to half a decade ago,
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 the post would take around a week.
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, businesses have benefitted immensely from
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. The operations that would take months are now completed in a few days. Businesses can now call abroad for free,
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 was really expensive a decade ago. On top of that, huge machines were needed.
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, the modern technology is much more convenient.
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, we can easily send thousands of messages from our mobile. The same activity was done by visiting the post office in the past.
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, these days big companies are paying more attention to the user experience than ever before. To put the huge size of these companies into perspective,
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 sends ten million messages in a minute,
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 is how convenient the new systems are.
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, communications will continue to evolve, and I think if it
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 for the betterment of mankind, we should embrace it.

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The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • modern communication
  • traditional letter writing
  • personal touch
  • emotional value
  • formal writing
  • speed and efficiency
  • instant messaging
  • societal norms
  • job applications
  • heartfelt messages
  • adaptation
  • changing communication landscape
  • contemporary methods
  • nostalgia
  • digital correspondence
  • written expression
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