Some people think that government should tax unhealthy foods to encourage people to eat healthier. To what extent do you agree or disagree.
Some argue that the government should impose a
tax
on junk foods
in order to promote healthy eating habits. This
essay completely agrees with this
statement because imposing fees on junk foods
can reduce its demand and it can also
help decrease the strain in the health sector.
Unhealthy foods
are one of the most sold products in the supermarket. If lawmakers put a tax
on them, manufacturers will have to increase their prices, thus
it can decrease the interest in these food items. Instead
of buying expensive junk foods
, people will shift to buying healthy foods
. For instance
, in the UK they put higher taxes on sugar and because of that the prices of unhealthy beverages increased as well which resulted in the decline in sales. Thus
, putting a tax
on unhealthy foods
can be helpful in order to help society eat healthier.
In addition
to that, it can also
help decrease the strain in the health sector. Obesity is caused by the poor eating habits of people. And obesity is associated with diseases such
as heart problems, and diabetes mellitus. Imposing a tax
on unhealthy foods
can reduce its consumption, thus
, it can lower the number of obesity-related diseases. For example
, in the Philippines one of the leading causes of kidney disease is diabetes. And the government is allocating a lot of money to the healthcare system in order to help those undergoing dialysis. Hence
, putting a tax
can improve the overall
well-being of the individual.
In conclusion, encouraging people to eat nutritious food can be done by putting taxes on unhealthy foods
. And this
can help lower its demand and the problems in the health sector.Submitted by yoko.onerom on
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