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Pie chart bellow give information about the house hold expenditures of an average vs family in different years. summarizes the information by selecting and reporting the main features

Pie chart bellow give information about the house hold expenditures of an average vs family in different years. summarizes the information by selecting and reporting the main features
#bellow #information #house #expenditures #years #features
The pie charts below
illustrates
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illustrate
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 give six
Correct quantifier usage
pieces of informations
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informations
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information
 about the
house hold
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household
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 in 1970 and 2004.
Overall
,
it is clear that
mortgage
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mortgages
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 had the highest rate in two different years.
According to
 the graph, in 1970
mortgage
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mortgages
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 stood in
the
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apply
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first
place
 (26%).
In addition
, food with
the
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a
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slightly
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slight
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 difference from
mortgage
 stood in the second
place
 (25%) and clothing with the 3 difference from food stood in the third
place
while
,
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apply
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 in 2004 50% of that chart
was
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apply
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belongged
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belonged
 to the
mortgage
.
Moreover
, clothing and childcare had the same per
cent
 (10%).
Also
, transport had the lowest per
cent
 about 5%.
In addition
, entertainment with
the
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apply
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1%
from
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of
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 food stood in
the
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apply
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second
place
 in 2004
whereas
, in 1970 childcare had the lowest rate exactly 1%.
Also
, transport and entertainment had the same
per
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percentage
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cent
 (13%).
As a result
, it is obvious that
mortgage
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mortgages
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 had the highest per
cent
 in 1970 and 2004.
Also
, in 1970 childcare had the lowest rate
while
 in 2004 transport stood in the
last
place
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also, in addition, while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words mortgage, place, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "difference" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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