The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and the number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The
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line chart gives information about how many
shops
closed, and how many new stores opened in a certain country, over a period of 7 years.
Overall
, what stands out from the graph is that the rate of closing and opening
shops
saw a downward trend.
However
, at the beginning of the
period
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period,
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the figure for opening
shops
was more than closing them, there were more closures
at the end
of the duration. In 2011,
number
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of
shops
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shop
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openings was at the highest rate in the whole period with approximately 8500, albeit, it saw a sharp
drob
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drop
to just under 4000 in 2012. After that, it experienced a fluctuating trend, until levelled off at 3000 in 2018. As for
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for
shops
were
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closed, it started at just above 6000, and saw a few years
instability
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until 2014.
Then
, it witnessed a sharp fall to under 1000 in 2015, which was the lowest amount in
the
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all years.
After
this
point, the rate saw
an
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dramatic rise and
over took
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overtook
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opening
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the opening
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shops
trend and reached roughly 6000 in 2018.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words shops with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • retail landscape
  • net growth
  • market dynamics
  • economic indicators
  • fluctuations
  • pivotal
  • consumption patterns
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • downward/upward trend
  • stabilize
  • recession
  • boom
  • retail sector
  • closure rate
  • inauguration/opening rate
  • consumer market
  • saturate
  • commercial viability
  • profitability
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