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Some people say that it is possible to tell a lot about a person’s culture and character from their choice of clothes. Do you agree or disagree?

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Many
people
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 believe that they can judge human culture and character based on their dress. I entirely disagree, it is impossible to assess humans
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 their
clothes
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. Globalisation grants access to multicultural attires.
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since
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 widely use social media in their lives, they watch an enormous amount of advertisements on a daily basis which attracts their attention to current fashions and trends so
people
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 make choices
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.
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friends and colleagues
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 play a vital role when
people
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 take clothing into consideration. Oftentimes, after getting influenced by co-workers,
people
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 adopt their dressing styles.
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, nowadays humans from different backgrounds, work for multinational companies when they interact with each other, they usually talk about their traditional dresses, and eventually most of the time they try different attires.
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,
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 opt for plenty of clothing and are not easy to judge on the basis of it. The main reason behind a dressing would be the event which is going to happen.
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the corporate sector follows a formal dressing as their dress-code.
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engagements and weddings are events when
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 wear vibrant colours.
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weather constraints are highly inevitable and can not be ignored
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 making decisions for attires.
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, lots of
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 are irritated with wearing multiple
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 at a time but in extreme weather conditions, they have to wear a variety of jackets and other stuff to warm themselves.
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, in light of the aforementioned reasons
people
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 adopt various dress codes. In conclusion, most
people
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 think that human culture and character can be judged by their
clothes
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. I completely disagree,
clothes
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 do not allow you to know someone.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • garments
  • traditional attire
  • sartorial choices
  • expressive style
  • cultural identity
  • psychological implications
  • non-verbal cues
  • globalization
  • perceptions
  • professional demeanor
  • societal norms
  • economic constraints
  • subcultures
  • fashion movements
  • individualism
  • stereotype
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