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Online sites have made it easy for the public to access information without the need to buy physical products like newspapers and books at no additional cost.

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with, Newspapers and books are the traditional methods of reading as they were the first sources to access media coverage without any censorship.

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online news sites are capable of providing the same details , there are some censors.

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the censors, advertisements pop up a lot more frequently on websites as compared to already printed texts ,another flaw is that reading digitalised text requires internet connections ,which are quite expensive today

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, the printed papers are still the same cost as they were in the past times.

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, the Internet contains a large amount of information that texted notes can't provide ,on top of that people have the choice to read

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their needs without buying books as they can be pretty outdated ,

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details presented on the web searches are updated at regular intervals.

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, Printing does more harm to our environment as it requires chopping wood in order to create

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in the USA ,the government have put some restriction on organizations that harms the ecosystem for their own benefit.

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,texted accounts can cause some severe complications ,

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digital media is pretty harmless and covers everyone's needs without much consequences. In conclusion, Physical texts are worse than internet-based sources in many ways ,which might put an end to

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Clear Comprehensive Ideas

Try to develop each argument more fully, providing detailed examples or evidence to support your points. This will enhance the clarity and comprehensiveness of your ideas.

Logical Structure

Be sure to distinguish ideas more clearly; avoid run-on sentences that can muddle the logical flow of your essay.

Complete Response

The essay presents a balanced view, considering both the advantages and disadvantages of accessing information online versus traditional methods.

Introduction Conclusion Present

You have a clear introduction and conclusion that outline the main points and wrap up the discussion effectively.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

276 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Technological Dependency
Interpersonal Skills
Digital Communication Channels
Face-to-face Interactions
Collaborative Learning
Team-Building Skills
Curriculum
Group Dynamics
Communication, Compromise, and Collective Problem-solving
Professional Skill Workshops
On-the-job Training

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