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You recently took a trip. In your absence, a friend did you a big favour. Write a letter thanking them. In your letter, include: ● what the favour was ● how this favour helped you ● an offer of compensation

#trip #absence #friend #favour #offer #compensation
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 my gratitude towards your assistance when I was on my trip to Canada . You treated my house and my children like yours during my conference trip which
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 about one week , when I came back my kids told me how you take care of them and provided all the facilities and love .
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, my house is spotless just because of your tremendous efforts
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 I had no stress and I concentrated on my work efficiently. I am glad to inform you that I got
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 I was away to secure my professional life.
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, I have bought you a Michael Kors watch which is your favourite brand . I hope you will like it . Once again thank you so much and I can't wait to see you . Yours truly, Priya
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Coherence and Cohesion
For a higher score, ensure your letter follows a clear and logical structure. This involves an introduction, body paragraphs each focusing on a different aspect of the favour, and a conclusion. Pay special attention to the transition between paragraphs to improve the flow of ideas.
Coherence and Cohesion
Make sure your letter has an appropriate greeting and closing. While 'Dear Sam,' is an acceptable opening, the closing 'Yours truly,' could be made warmer or more personal, especially considering the context of thanking a friend.
Task Achievement
To enhance your task achievement score, focus on completely addressing all parts of the prompt. Provide more detailed examples or explanations on how the favour helped you specifically, and how it allowed you to focus on your professional duties without worry.
Task Achievement
Adopt a tone that is consistently warm and appreciative throughout your letter. While your gratitude is clear, expressions of how the favour impacted you personally and professionally can be strengthened with more emotive language.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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