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Scholarships are a great opportunity to gain the study you like. What are the main advantages or disadvantages of studying abroad?

#scholarships #opportunity #gain #study
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It is argued that there are many benefits when people get funding from the government to
study
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 overseas. I believe that can make us have a new relation from outside and become
intelegent
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intelligent
. Fundamentally, when
individual
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 go to
study
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 abroad they will have a new experience. If they went
to
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outside, especially out
from
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 their countries, they could
have
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make
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a new friends
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a new friend
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,
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and, new
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new
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a new
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 atmosphere and create
a
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apply
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new
relationship
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relationships
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 from there . Take Lina, my friend as an example, when she back from
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the Netherland
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Netherland
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, she
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 me her new friend from there
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that
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 is not the same nationality
like
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 us and
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that's
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 a good thing that they still
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each
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 other like siblings.
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, In my
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that is
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a
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one of the benefits
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when we can go outside.
Subsequently
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, there
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 other reasons when
pople
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people
 go to other nations. They will learn about new culture
such
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 as
,
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 traditional food and traditional dance and
also
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 they can learn a new thing that they cannot find in their own country. The
different
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 between people who
study
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 abroad and the people who live in their own country is they can feel more confident when they want to talk or do anything because of their knowledge and experience.
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, they become
smart
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smarter
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 than before.
To sum up
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, there are many positive aspects,
such
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having
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 a new experience and it will make them smarter than before because
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study
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studying
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 abroad in other countries.
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, they really feel more confident when they want to do
the
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a
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 variety of jobs.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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