Your friend is thinking about learning to drive and would like some advice. Write a letter to your friend. -Say why a driving license is advantageous. -Recommend a driving school. -Give extra guidance/tips.
Dear Shokhrukh,
I am writing to you about the fact that you want to get a driver's license
If you learn the most rules of the road at a driving
school
in the city Use synonyms
center
and Change the spelling
centre
also
learn the lessons well, there are various discounts. As for the driving Linking Words
school
, there are many qualified and experienced teachers, and most importantly, the conditions for your learning are excellent. There you Use synonyms
learned
to drive the car you want easily and quickly. In fact, I Wrong verb form
learn
also
graduated there. It is Linking Words
also
located in the city Linking Words
center
and is the best driving Change the spelling
centre
school
in the city.
A lot of cars have come there nowUse synonyms
,
because people's cars are different. You will Remove the comma
apply
also
learn to drive your car well because I believe in it. You will Linking Words
also
learn to drive your car well because I believe in it.
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to conclude
, I want you to study at a good driving Linking Words
school
and I hope you learn the rules of the road well.
With warm wishes
Mr OdilUse synonyms
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Coherence and Cohesion
To enhance your coherence and cohesion, try to clearly separate your ideas into distinct paragraphs. This helps in making your letter more organized and easier for the reader to follow.
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You have repeated some phrases, which can reduce the clarity of your message. Keep an eye out for repetition and aim to vary your language for a more engaging and clear communication.
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Consider incorporating more specific examples or personal experiences when explaining the advantages of having a driving license and recommending a driving school, as this makes your advice more tangible and relatable.
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You've included a personal recommendation which adds a level of trustworthiness to your advice.
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The letter has a friendly tone throughout, making it approachable and engaging for the reader.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite