The chart shows internet speeds in five different Australian cities in megabytes per second in 2005 and 2015. The graph shows the type of internet connections Australian people had in 2010.

The chart shows internet speeds in five different Australian cities in megabytes per second in 2005 and 2015. The graph shows the type of internet connections Australian people had in 2010.
The pie
chart
gives information about the variety of
internet
connections Australians had in the year 2010,
while
the bar graph presents a comparison of
internet
speed in several Australian cities between 2005 and 2015.
Overall
it can be seen from the pie
chart
that broadband was a highly popular type of
internet
access,
while
dial-up was not in demand over the given period.
It is clear that
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the
internet
speed increased rapidly within 10 years.
Furthermore
, Sydney showed the fastest test results whilst Brisbane the slowest in both 2005 and 2015 years. In detail, the pie
chart
illustrates that three-quarters of Australians - the majority were satisfied with broadband.
Although
just above one-third of people preferred mobile
internet
access rather than dial-up. Under two per cent chose to have it.
However
, it left just below one per cent of citizens, who did not have
internet
connection in 2010.
According to
data on the bar
chart
the quickest
internet
in 2005 was in Sydney. It reached
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approximately 13 megabytes per
second
,
while
the poorest speed was in Brisbane and showed just above 2 megabytes per
second
. It can be noticed that Perth City was
second
of five and was fixed on nearly 5 MBPS. By 2015 the
internet
speed rapidly went up compared with 2005. Sydney and Brisbane speeds visibly uplifted by approximately 1 MBPS.
Moreover
, in Melbourne, the quality of the
internet
jumped up from 2 to about 6 megabytes per
second
.
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