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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.
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The diagram illustrates the
difference
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differences
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 that happened in
central
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the central
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 library from 20 years ago to
present
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the present
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 .
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that there
are
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is
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 a significant change in infrastructure , facilities and amenities of the library throughout the period given.
Firstly
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, the CDs ,videos computer games
room
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 which located in
northwest
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the northwest
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 corner has been replaced by storytelling events and children's fiction books and was added two
sofa
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sofas
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also
Linking Words
 has been extended.
In
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addition
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addition,
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 the
room
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 of children's book
converted
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was converted
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 into
lecture
Correct article usage
a lecture
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room
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 .In the
medial
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media
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 there
was
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were
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 adult non-fiction books it still with some
of
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development , it became have self-service machines and information desk .
Furthermore
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, the enquiry desk
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on that
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that
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the
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 site in
southeast
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the southeast
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 corner has been demolished and returned constructed to be
cafe
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a cafe
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.
Moreover
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, from western tip reading
room
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 for newspapers and magazines has been destroyed and replaced by
computer
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a computer
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room
Use synonyms
.
Also
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the
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apply
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both
entrance
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entrances
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 have
been remained
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remained
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 untouched without any
adjusted
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adjustment
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words room with synonyms.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • layout
  • shelving
  • reading area
  • reference section
  • encyclopedias
  • dictionaries
  • circulation desk
  • transactions
  • digital media
  • computer stations
  • multimedia rooms
  • café area
  • social environment
  • leisure-friendly
  • expanded reading areas
  • user experience
  • comfortable seating
  • children's section
  • engage younger readers
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