Space travel has been possible for some time. Some people think space tourism could be developed in the future which can help to develop countries' economies. To what extent do you think this is a positive or negative development ?

In my opinion, space
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expansion
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a nation
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vast
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economic
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prospects
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reputation. To simplify, a trip
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back and form in space can cost up to approximately millions of currencies in order to purchase the
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necessary
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further
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huge
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benefits to the host country.
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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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