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The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The diagram illustrates the
plan’s
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plan
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 conditions of Central
Library
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right
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 now and 20 years ago.
Overall
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, there are many differences
places
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in places
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 of
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library
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libraries
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 between 20 years ago and now,
such
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 as
book
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 placement, lecturer
room
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, cafe, information desk and reading
room
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. In the past, there
were
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was
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enquiry
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an enquiry
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 desk
in
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on
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right
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the right
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 side and
reading
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a reading
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room
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in
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on
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 the left side
in
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at
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gate
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the gate
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 entrance of
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library
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the library
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. Afterwards, there were
place
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places
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 of
book
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 differentiated based on fiction and non-fiction in the middle of the
library
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room
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 with
table
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tables
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 and chairs between both of them. There are two rooms in the corner,
such
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 as children’s
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book
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books
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 and computer games. After 20 years, there are a
lot
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lot of
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 changes
from
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in
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 the Central
Library
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 rooms. the enquiry desk was removed to become a cafe shop now. Afterwards, the computer
room
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replaced
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was replaced
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 by
children’s
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the children’s
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book
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 and
move
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moved
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 to in front of the
room
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 which was previously the reading
room
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.
Moreover
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, the chairs and table
was
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were
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 replaced and
built
Verb problem
apply
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the self-service machine
in
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on
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 the
right
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 side close to
adult
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the adult
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 fiction
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book’s
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book
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 place.
In addition
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, there is
lecture
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a lecture
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room
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right
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 now.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words library, right, book, room with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • public library
  • layout
  • reading area
  • computer station
  • multimedia section
  • children's area
  • reference section
  • study cubicles
  • shelving units
  • digital media
  • technological advancements
  • user behavior
  • accessibility
  • traffic flow
  • modernization
  • community needs
  • conversion
  • allocation
  • removal
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